A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to company in your letter -describe the benefit of sponsoring the sport team -summarise the benefits of paying the concepts -say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

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to provide my feedback about your plan to sponsor some arts and sports programs in our hometown.

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, I would like to convey my opinion about sports activity.

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sports are physical exercises, if we try to form a team

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the youth could get more competitive and have opportunities to participate in several competitions with different teams. So the name of our city will be established there.

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, As you mentioned that you are interested to conduct open-air concerts, it would be great entertainment for all of us.

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, senior citizens are enjoying their retirement life, and these types of activities are crucial for their emotional and mental health.

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, being active and engaging in their free time would be an advantage for them. I would like to suggest that if you are willing to implement

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activities ,

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kindly consider both of these for the whole community. Thank you for your consideration Yours faithfully, Asha Vijayan

ashakiranbhavsarFri Jan 27 2023

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