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Government should spend money on rail way rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#government #money #rail #roads
It has long been argued
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whether Authority allocates more on railroads in the annual budget or on highways.
Although
 it is flexible to move
one
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 place to another by road, railways have various possibilities. In my opinion, railways can eliminate not only modern problems like traffic but
also
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rail
 connectivity
instead
 of roads and highways. To start with,
rail
transportation
that is
 introduced in
early
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 modern age has
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 potential to mitigate gridlocks and
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save time. First of all, trains are bigger than buses or cars that can help a large number of people attain to reach their
destination
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.
In addition
, in terms of
transportation
 price, travelling
byn
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by
 train is less expensive
while
 it is necessary to bear fuel costs and toll
vosts
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costs
 using other vehicles.
On the other hand
, studies show that most
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the
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people enjoy a long trip by train but not by bus; because they find it tiring.
Likewise
,
rail
transportation
 cuts
the
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air pollution down as it emits less smoke than other vehicles.
For instance
, where trucks, buses, cars or other devices use
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, diesel or other gases to run, trains can be operated with coal or electricity.
Moreover
, it limits
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 and rapid production of various vehicles. In a nutshell, there are multiple possibilities
of
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rail
 connectivity to protect the Environment and to travel simultaneously. So, if the government works for fast trains, maximum
rail
 lines and wide stations, it should discourage people
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 private
transportation
as well as
 reduce traffic and the rate of road accidents.
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