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What are disadvantages and disadvantages of owning a car Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people argued that using a private machine big a bad influence on the environment more than public
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, driving a
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 has a fatal effect on climate change.
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 is because cars emit carbon dioxide and harmful gases into the air . To start with, possessing
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 has a number of benefits complete to public
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.
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 as , passengers can have the freedom on deciding the schedule and roads to reach their destination, and going on trips with their families on one's private machines. What is more , being able to work-related transportation jobs ,
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 to, being a driver , working companies as a driver.
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, one point of view in favour of owning a
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 is more convenient.
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, in comfortable seats , humans can choose the model of their
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 , whose children pester when they seat public
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 ,but , in their machine humans can calm their children.
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 , the disadvantages of possessing an own vehicle cause fatal accidents. Because of accidents passengers have been injured and died by unfortunate incidents .A
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 disadvantage of owning a
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 may be expensive to repair the
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 .Even though, some users tend to drive recklessly or drive
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 drunk .
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, owners should be worried about safety and parking places
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 they are driving in different places or spend pretty much time in traffic jams. Taking everything into account, using private machines changed our atmosphere rather than public
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. In fact, nowadays the whole world uses private cars for more than a billion .
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 the reason the surrounding conditions are sharply affected.
Car
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 is which
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 cause tons of problems.
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 why people use public
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instead
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 of private machine
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing output
  • Production trend
  • Significant peak
  • Notable decline
  • Fluctuation
  • Technological advancements
  • Economic challenges
  • Consumer demand
  • Sustainability
  • Government regulation
  • Predictive analysis
  • Market dynamics
  • Environmental impact
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