Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of being a professional artist. Give your opinion

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Some people think that being a professional artist
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got a variety
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pros and cons. In my opinion, there is had a lot of advantages.
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is obvious that all children are not of the same intellect, and sometimes it becomes difficult for educators to teach them in
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schools.
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, the government should pay attention to talented pupils. We know from prehistoric times, the most capable
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have got congenital
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professional
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artist in the world is Leonardo da Vinci. I strongly agree
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capable
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is improved with
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capacity.
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my personal perspective,
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become
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artist
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is
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thing for me.
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, you can easily become
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in the world.
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, it has
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some negative effects.
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, you are always befitting under the media. If you make some mistakes or make any silly imitate,
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after a few minutes, you can be finding yourself on
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social
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.
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, you've had a lot of fans and
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, a lot of enemies. As you know from the news, famous people house sometimes
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is because most
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the
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people think,
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famous
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are always considering wealthy
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. But, they don't know that they have many problems, taxes and other worries.
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why we should not rush to conclusions. Taking everything into account, there is have advantages and disadvantages sides. In
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world
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everyone wants to be a billionaire or famous individual.
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, in my view
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thing meaning for me same significance.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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