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Nowadays parent put too much pressure on thier cgildern to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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The more digitalization accelerates, the more people spend their
time
 on
smartphones
, let alone young children. In my view,
this
 trend is caused by the attractive content that
smartphones
 provide, and it brings a negative impact on
kids
such
 as mental and physical health problems. The reason why some young people spend their
time
 on mobile phones is that application providers provide a diverse range of attractive applications, which fall
kids
 into addictions. Those contents keep popping up and there is almost no end.
For instance
,
kids
 enjoy playing gaming applications, and every
time
 when they complete one game, the hints for the next game appear so that it is hard for them to stop.
In other words
, those applications are manipulating
kids
 to spend more
time
 on the game.
As a result
, it is becoming an issue that more and more
kids
 are suffering from mental and physical issues compared to
kids
 a decade ago. Spending more
time
 on the screen steals physical exercise opportunities and in-person communication chances from those children. It was published in the NHK news that the amount of
time
 looking at a screen is in proportion to the rate of suffering from mental illness.
Therefore
, spending more
time
 on
smartphones
 affects
kids
 badly. In conclusion, the attractive content
that is
 provided by application companies is incentivising
kids
 to spend more
time
 on
smartphones
, and it is bringing physical and mental problems. I think it is important for parents to monitor
kids
 and remind them to stop using it if they spend too much
time
 on it.
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