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It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to find information. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is normally believed that
Internet
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 is an excellent means of communication but some
people
 think that it is not the best place to find
information
. At present times, we cannot spend a single moment of our life without the
Internet
. The
Internet
 has become a part and parcel of our life.It has reduced our distance and turned our world into a global village.
Moreover
, through the
Internet
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 we can communicate with
the
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people
 sitting in any corner of the world.
Besides
, we can see our friends and relatives through
video
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a video
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call
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calls
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 with the help of the
Internet
.
For instance
, during the Covid when we were locked inside our
home
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 we communicated with our friends and relatives with the help of the
Internet
.
On the other hand
, we can get a huge amount of
Information
 from the
Internet
. Though some
people
 think that the
Internet
 is not the best place to find
Information
. It is not quite correct nor quite wrong. It is true that
,
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 we find lots of
information
from
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 the
Internet
 but sometimes we do not get
the
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authentic answer from the
Internet
.
Moreover
, sometimes, we can find wrong
Information
 on the
Internet
 which leads
chaos
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to chaos
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 in
the
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society.
Secondly
, many users of
Internet
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the Internet
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 spread wrong
information
 through the
Internet
 to misguide
the
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people
.
For example
, during the covid,many rumours were spread about the Covid which were completely false. Thereby, we can say that, though
Internet
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the Internet
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 is an excellent means of communication because we can communicate with other
people
 in a short period of time but it is not the best place to find
information
 because can find huge amounts of
information
 on the
Internet
 which are not authentic and can misguide
the
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people
.Still,
internet
 can be used for finding
information
 but we have to be careful about that
information
.
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