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Some people think universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. Others believe that this is an unacceptable policy.

Some
people
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 think that
universities
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 should accept equal numbers of male and female
students
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 in every subject
while
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 other
people
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 believe that it is an unacceptable policy. I think that
this
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 is a widely held perception in many parts of the world. In the following essay, I discuss these situations and give my own opinion. First and foremost, nowadays the amount of
students
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 is dramatically increasing
year
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 by
year
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. They are both girls and
boys
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. There are a lot of subjects and these subjects are full of
students
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. Yet, there are some fields where the number of girls is more than
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.
For instance
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, in my hometown, girls tend to learn the subject of English.
For
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this
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 reason, the
universities
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 that belong to learning the English language are full of female
students
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.
Moreover
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, there are other subjects that more
boys
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 tend to attend in these courses. I think that
this
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 is a common situation.
On the other hand
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,
universities
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 should accept equal numbers of male and female
students
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. Because there are a lot of jobs that need both women and men. I think that it is important to encourage young
boys
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 to learn foreign languages rather than studying electronic or construction lessons, especially, in my hometown. The solution to
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 phenomenon would be teaching the
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 about equality with their school teachers.
To conclude
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, I reiterate my position that, nowadays the number of
students
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 is dramatically increasing
year
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 by
year
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.
Then
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 some
people
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 think that
universities
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 should accept equal numbers of male and female
students
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 in every subject
while
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 other
people
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 believe that it is not an acceptable situation. I personally believe that teachers should teach children about equality at
universities
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 since they are studying at their schools.

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