Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Other believe that some information is too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your ownopinion. Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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range of resources with scientists, entrepreneurs ,teachers and professors is beneficial.
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financial reports either quarterly,
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any leading daily
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the
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performance on yearly basis. So that, they have
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growth.
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university students share
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study with academic
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that, make the modified resources
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authentic.
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the global level- like working on nuclear energy. If
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