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Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times. They don’t want their children to read any entertainment books because they think it is wast of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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Reading is an essential skill
children
 have to develop. Some parents prefer educational
books
 rather than amusing materials for their
children
 to read. They do not believe entertaining
books
 will benefit their
children
 and would be a complete waste of time. I strongly disagree with
this
 statement since there are some benefits to reading entertainment
books
.
To begin
 with, it is true that educational
books
 are important for
children
 in order to learn meaningful aspects of life and to develop essential skills at a younger age,
such
 as critical thinking and problem-solving ability.
However
, reading amusing
books
 has benefited
children
 in developing artistic minds. To illustrate, stories can make a child uses his/her imagination which would be a great way to learn how to be a creative person.
For instance
, drawing is a skill that needs creativity and without ,imagination it will be limited to what the child sees in life.
in addition
 to that,
children
 can get bored easily so reading educational
books
 constantly could lead them to hate reading.
Also
, being able to choose what they like to read has a great impact on developing an independent personality which can make them feel confident and would teach them how to choose by themselves.
To sum up
,
children
 should be able to choose the
books
 they want to read in order to make them appreciate reading and to help them to become creative.
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