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It is important for people to take riske, both in their professional lives and their personal lifes. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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in our present
life
 it has been proven that taking risks plays a vital role both in the professional and personal areas of an individual's
life
, taking risks, has so many advantages, but
also
 can be a real threat to someone's
life
 if the person, did not think of it, in
this
 essay, we will shade lights on both the bone and * to commence with, the benefits of taking a risky decision, can be conducive to real opportunities that can change the Individual's
life
 to the next level, whether it was a professional or personal decision,
in addition
, it widens the person's prospects and gives them the chance to live a new experience That can affect their personality,
for example
, my friend was so hesitated to apply for her dream job because She thinks that she was not qualified enough, I told her a dream. ,
moreover
, to take the risk and now she is living apart from the experience you can learn a lot about yourself, and boost your self-confidence, but the best thing is that will have no regrets. *
on the other hand
, a pessimist person can see it as a waste of energy, as it can be real a threat if the individual did not think about the consequences of the situation, and, may affect the way you look at yourself which may lead to losing self-confidence and the disappointment of the failure can be Conducive to depression. In conclusion, as with any, subject
this
 bas its merits and demerits but taking risks is a pivotal part of success, you can lose a lot if you did not try but you can lose nothing if you tried, So by not trying in I believe that it is advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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