Supermarkets should only sell food products from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

There
are
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variety
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a variety
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of
foodstuff
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foodstuffs
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sold in supermarkets.
However
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the majority of
products
are imported from other countries. I strongly believe we need to look into alternative solutions rather than importing essential food
products
from overseas. I will discuss
this
further
in my essay. Majority of the people have created a habit to buy
products
from supermarkets
due to
the
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fast-moving lifestyle, but what they do not understand is how effectively it could destroy our health and minimum the life cyc le of a human. The reason could be simple, imported
products
have to sustain for a long period of time compared to local
products
.
This
could be mainly
due to
the time that takes the
product
to import into the country. In
this
case, chemicals have to be added to preserve the nature of the
product
till it gets to the
consumer
but the supermarkets attract the
consumer
to buy the
product
by keeping the display attractive. We need to encourage our local farmers.
This
can be only accomplished by finding a way to connect the
consumer
and the supplier. Sri Lanka has a good solid,
hence
any food
products
such
as vegetables and fruits can be grown at home and the results are better than the overseas
products
.
Also
, the
products
are fresh and in less time supplier can deliver to the
consumer
and maintain a short due date for the
product
.
Majority
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of countries
suffers
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from cancer and other diseases
due to
the chemical intake in the body.
This
cannot be solved overnight but we can limit the intake by supporting local
products
. Considering the above facts, we need the encourage the
consumer
to buy more
products
which are hygienic and
quality
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. We can do awareness programmes on food
products
and the effects that can cause on health, not only limited that. Government can
involve
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and initiate a programme to encourage people to grow at home and
also
support farmers by taking the
product
at a good rate. At some point,
this
initiative could improve massively and help the economy to upsize
the
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people's
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
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