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Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To whant extant do you agree with this statement

#wealth #guaranty #happiness #whant
It is said,that you can buy everything except happiness.In my opinion,
money
 plays a big role in our life.
However
.nowadays they started to be not only a way of trading but
also
 a way of joy.
Firstly
,From ancient times communities used
money
 and coins.They have been made from different materials,
however
,they always have been used for trading.In the modern,world we study and
then
 work for
money
.It is said:"
Money
 makes the world go round".I completely agree with
this
 statement.Now wealth started to be a kind of obsession.
People
 don't feel joy from their job,they only do it for the
money
.Our lives turned into a race,where we compete who makes more
money
.
Due to
 ,
this
 we started to use
money
 in incorrect ways.
Hence
 apply
this
 we just waste them on useless things.
Secondly
,our world is easy for those who make a killing.
Money
 can deal with all of your problems.
Hence
 to,
this
 you
also
 can you them to make you happy,because in some cases they can do it easily.The perfect example of it is death diseases.Of course,poor
people
 can't afford to pay all the bills for it.Mainly the hospital just let those
people
 die.
However
,if you are wealthy you can afford everything.For your
money
 you can treat any disease,the question is how much
money
 can you give.
However
,
people
 have to remember that we all are mortal and someday we are going to die.At that moment no
money
 is able to save you. In conclusion,happiness is a thing that we live for.For,everyone it differs.
However
,it is better to cry in a luxurious car than to smile on a bicycle
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