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Some people believe that violence in the media, such as in television programs and films, directly results in violent behavior. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Media has become an indispensable thing for entertainment in
people
's lives. There is a debate going on about the behavioural impact of films and television programs. Some
people
 think that
violence
 in the media directly results in violent behaviour and some
people
 maybe don’t think so.
This
 essay will analyze how
this
 can be the main reason for violent behaviour in
people
. A lot of
crime
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crimes
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 of
violence
 happened in the past, especially young crime. Young
people
 around 10 to 16 have a bad mentality and easily be affected by some
violence
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 movies that have a tag 18+.
For example
, an eleven kid watching a movie. In the movie, the main character is a psychopath but the movies made him really cool. The kid may see that as really cool and try some
violence
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 stuff like the main character.
Moreover
, when
people
 watch
violence
 on television, they start assuming that it is normal.
Although
 it is very painful in reality.
People
 take
this
 kind of news for granted
,
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 as if it was bound to happen. Even children think that it is not
such
 a big deal.
Thus
,
this
 mindset is a result of watching crime serials and movies excessively.
To conclude
,
violence
 in the media isn’t very bad if
people
 can take it as just in action. If
people
 are affected and intend to do some
violence
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 thing in real life
then
 it is certainly dangerous for society.
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