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Band 6.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Last week, you celebrated your birthday with some friends in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed yourselves very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter mention the food and service explain that you really enjoyed the atmosphere suggest any improvements to make things better You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#minutes #week #birthday #friends #restaurant #success #food #service #atmosphere #improvements #addresses #sir #madam
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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that on December 21, 2023, I was at your restaurant with my friends and we really enjoyed that moment. The food that we ordered was very delicious and well-presented. All of my friends are vegetarian so it is the first
time
 that we had plenty of options on the menu.
Moreover
, the staff was very professional and friendly and assisted us in choosing the best options. Apart from the meal, we really enjoyed the live music which was on at that
time
 with a very calm voice.
Also
, we were all impressed with the different
lightning
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lighting
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 systems on the table with the beautiful and comfortable seating arrangement. All people occupied the space without any waiting or rush. As our experience was really well at your restaurant
but
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apply
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I have some suggestions to make things better.
Firstly
, there was no proper parking space outside so we had to wait a long to get parking.
Secondly
, the restrooms were very unhygienic so they must
clean
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 from
time
 to
time
. Kind regards, Chris
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coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear central theme with sentences that support that theme to maintain coherence and avoid introducing irrelevant details.
coherence cohesion
Work on developing a logical progression of ideas, using cohesive devices to connect points and paragraphs more neatly.
task achievement
In Task 1 letters, try to fully extend and develop each point to address all parts of the prompt in sufficient detail.
task achievement
Stay consistent with the formal tone appropriate for writing to a restaurant manager or owner, avoiding overly casual language.
task achievement
Use a wider range of vocabulary to better express subtleties in your suggestions and opinions, avoiding repetition of words and phrases.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Grateful, appreciation, memorable celebration
  • Delectable, sumptuous, culinary delights
  • Attentive, courteous, top-notch service
  • Vibrant, cozy, inviting ambiance
  • Constructive feedback, recommendations
  • Enhance, optimize, refine
  • Loyalty, patronage, looking forward
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