A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings that money should be spent on knocking down old building and building new ones. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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are very stingy to spend

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buildings

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of new making

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they like renovating the old

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people

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on new

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madness.

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even the renovation of

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waste of time and

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modern era most of the places were constructed

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building buildings

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that nowadays architecture and engineering are

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and educated they make new

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in modern style and fully

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all-natural calamities.

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making a new building

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less consumption of

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consumes less time and

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should have to take strict action on old

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and they have to make new

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with modern design

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affordable price. To recapitulate,

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my opinion new style

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are

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stronger and much better

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of old

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live a good life and feel more

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in new

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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284 words

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Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Many students find it harder to study when they are at the university or college than when they were at school. Why is this? What can be done to solve the problem?