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You saw an advert in the newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event Write a letter of application to the organizers. In your letter: 1.Explain why you are interested in helping 2. Give details on suitable past experience 3. Suggest ways you might help with the event

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Dear Mr Bob I saw an advertisement in our local newspaper about you
want
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 to find some volunteers to assist your charity
event
 to provide some free food to poor people. I really have
the
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apply
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interesting
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interested
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 and want to join in because there are many poor and homeless people in the suburb
i
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 used to live so
i
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 know how hard for them to find some food to feed themselves The charity
event
 that you are organising now will be really helpful for them and
i
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I
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also
 want to make my own contribution.
last
 year, I attend a similar charity
event
 as
volunteer
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a volunteer
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 and we helped fifty people and offered them free lunch and
tought
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taught
 them how to cook a proper meal with
limited
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the limited
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ingredient
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. I learned a lot from that
event
such
 as organising the
event
 placement and staff to ensure the success of the
event
.
Moreover
, my major in college was culinary management so I can help you to write the menu for the
event
 and to train other volunteers. kind regards
kim
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Kim
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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