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🔶More and more people are eating healthy food and exercising regularly. 🔸What are the reasons for that? What can we do to make other people do the same?

#🔶more #people #food #🔸what
In recent years, it is getting popular to hire a personal coach to
do
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exercise
 safely in a gym and
also
people
 are more
concern
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 about what they eat because social media are full of articles
witten
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written
 about healthy diets. On the hand,
becaues
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because
 of the
enconomy
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economy
 has increased and
techonology
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technology
 has developed,
people
 can afford a better life
,
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 and get more information about health. There are several ways to help
people
 get
motivations
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motivation
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 on doing
exercise
 and eat
healthy
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healthily
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.
For instance
, many social platforms support some influencers to record their daily life which about how they
do
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the
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exercise
, and what
do
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they eat in general to inspire followers
keep
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 doing on their way.
Therefore
, influencers
also
 make some chat groups to make their fans discuss
with
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many common problems which can help
people
 cheer up each other when they are upset.
On the other hand
, it is an important part of education within the lessons at school and
families
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with families
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. Though everyone will learn the knowledge at school or online platforms
but
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it is better to encourage
people
follow
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to follow
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 the same way at home
first,
if every family members do it:
exercise
 and healthy diet at the same time and continue doing it as a habit, it will become
nature
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natural
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 to follow. In conclusion, even though
people
 start from different reasons and steps, afterwards,
people
 are cooking healthy food and
doing
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exercise
 regularly because they
are care
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 about
themselve
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themselves
.
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