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Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Government
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 plays a vital role in our environment and helps our society grow financially. Many argue that the council should take responsibility to provide finances and rule science
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 of personal companies. I partially agree with the statement as the
government
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's first priority should be scientific research.
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, private organizations are fully funded and have a strong baseline
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 researchers are dependent on authority a heavy amount of money on equipment is required.
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, giving finances to scientific research resulted in vaccines for covid. If the funds were provided to a private organization they would have doubled the sale rate of vaccines.
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, if the
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 are using there finances and resources it can not fully monitor its performance and serve society
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 if they provide money or sign a tender for a privately owned organization it can do regular check as its business deals in one type of business.
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, by signing a project or lease for testing water purification a privately owned company can spend more time and energy improving the resources and making a better environment.
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, the
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 should be accountable for funding scientific research but experiments regarding science should be conducted by both legislative bodies and private organisations to have healthy competition
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 a better place to live in.
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