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SOME PEOPLE SAY HISTORY IS ONE OF THE MOST IMPORTANCE SUBJECT IN SCHOOL. OTHER THINKS IN TODAY'S WORLD SUBJECT LIKE SCIENCE AND TECHONOGY ARE MORE IMPORTANCE THAN HISTORY. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

#people #history #importance #school #world #science #techonogy
The discussion of ancient culture is surely one that begs the question of exactly how it creates
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 impact on subjects like
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technology
. In my opinion,
due to
evolution
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 of gadgets and
demanding
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 value of
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 stream,
students
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such
 as
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history
.
However
, in
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 I will discuss both
the
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views. One clear fact is that awareness among young youth
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 their civilization has become appalling.
For instance
,
students
 have started disliking
history
lesson
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 in their academic period, as per oxford
university
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 professor it has been
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 that only 2% of
people
 are taking admission
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history
 classes, 10%
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 commerce, 58%
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 IT and
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students
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 to
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 stream.
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, I
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strong
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 thoughts that
history
 must
gets
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same
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 importance as compared to
science
 and
technology
.
Although
, learning about events which occurred in past, might feel
depressed
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 but on
other hand
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, we can gain knowledge which would be useful in leaving
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life
.
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, we all know about “Hitler the dictator”
how
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 he torture
people
 and let them
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 in
war
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, stories like
this
 make
students
 understand how our great
solider
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 fought for our freedom.
Moreover
, I should say
science
 and
technology
also
has
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 made
terrific
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 impact on
people
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life
, without modern gadgets and equipment
life
 is impossible. To illustrate
further
,
this
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life
 without
internet
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Internet
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 is
only
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 platform where
people
 can get all the knowledge.
To conclude
, both sides present strong arguments
history
 teach us moral value for our culture and
science
 and
technology
 make our
life
more
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easier.
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