In many countries people increasingly talk about money (how much they earn or how much they pay for things in their daily conversations). Why? Is this a positive or negative development?

In today's world, everything seems to orbit around
money
. A skyrocketing number of
people
hold a conversation on a daily basis about
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earned or an expensive purchase to impress others.
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essay will explore the reasons
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monetary discussion,
as well as
the potential drawbacks of
this
practice. The reasons
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increased talk about
money
are plentiful. First of all, in the past
generations
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money
had never been an influent topic, it was considered something to discuss between
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member
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or managed only by the patriarch, causing misconception and ineptitude in others. New generations,
therefore
, are trying to learn from past mistakes and acknowledge
informations
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discussing
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about
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finance daily.
Furthermore
, more men and women are giving economic
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on social media, so that more followers,
thus
income, could have been earned. Another reason, why
human-beings
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talk about
money
is to brag, showing off a
luxury
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lifestyle to impress others and, perhaps,
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accepted in the community.
Although
this
practice might have some
benefit
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,
such
as
acknowledgment
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of crucial information for
mankind
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economical
wellbeing
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, the downsides are far more important. Having a daily discussion about monetary numbers
,
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means that
people
will begin to value
money
more than other fundamental aspects of our lives. The world will shift
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attention to a materialistic
matter
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matters
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, rather than human-being rights, environmental issues and so on.
People
might become obsessed
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money
, doing everything in their power to create more income and disparity between
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and middle class.
Nevertheless
, some mankind could own debt for the mere reason of being part of
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a group
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of peers with an expensive lifestyle that they cannot afford.
To conclude
, some
people
talk about
money
to learn or teach about it, or to show off their life conditions. Despite the few positive effects of economic discussion, the drawbacks are greatly worse,
such
as obsession
for
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money
or higher debt.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • materialism
  • economic disparity
  • transparency
  • financial planning
  • financial stress
  • culture of comparison
  • societal taboos
  • financial literacy
  • savings
  • investments
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