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Precooked or convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#convenience #foods #methods #food #preparation
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I agree that precooked or
convenience
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foods
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 will become increasingly prevalent, but I do not believe they will completely replace traditional
foods
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 and
methods
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 of
food
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preparation
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. There are several reasons why
convenience
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foods
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 are becoming more popular.
First,
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as
people
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's lives become increasingly busy, they have less time to devote to meal
preparation
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 and are looking for quick and easy options.
Second,
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advances in technology have made it possible to produce and preserve
convenience
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foods
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 that are of high quality and have a long shelf life.
Third,
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the global
food
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 industry is becoming more experienced and is able to produce and market these products on a large scale.
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, I do not believe that
convenience
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foods
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 will completely replace traditional
foods
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 and
methods
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 of
food
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preparation
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. For one, traditional
foods
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 often have a strong cultural and emotional significance and are deeply ingrained in the customs and traditions of many communities.
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Additionally
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 many
people
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 are becoming more interested in the quality and origin of the
food
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 they eat, and are turning to locally sourced, organic, and sustainably produced
foods
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, which are often made using traditional
methods
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.
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Finally
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 in many cultures around the world, cooking and meal
preparation
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are
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 seen as a form of self-expression, and
people
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 will continue to enjoy the process of creating meals from scratch. One example of
this
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 trend is the increasing popularity of farm-to-table restaurants, which source their ingredients from local farmers and use traditional cooking techniques. Another is the rise of the home-cooking trend, where
people
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 are spending more time in the kitchen preparing meals from scratch. In conclusion,
convenience
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foods
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 will become increasingly prevalent, but traditional
foods
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 and
methods
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 of
food
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preparation
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 will continue to be valued and enjoyed by many
people
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. These traditional
foods
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 and
methods
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 are deeply ingrained in cultures and customs
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 and will continue to be an important part of
people
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's lives.
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