The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate the information about the median family expenses in
Japan
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and
Malaysia
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in the year 2010. The data has been calibrated into percentile.
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, at first glance , it is readily apparent that both nations mostly expend on housing, food and other goods or services.
however
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, the least spent on the health care system. To commence with, in 2010
Malaysia
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was the highest money spent on housing
34
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at 34
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per
cent
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, with
the
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apply
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Japan
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had only 21 per
cent
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of
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expenses approximately. Followed by
this
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Japan
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had
spended
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spent
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money 20 per
cent
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on transportation, compared with 10
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per cent
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of
expendation
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expedition
expectation
in
Malaysia
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. Moving
further
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, other goods and services spending money around 26 per
cent
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in
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of
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janapese
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Japanese
families less than that 3 per
cent
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of
Malaysia
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respectively. Despite , that food
accured
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accrued
acquired
mean expenditures at
house
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a house
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in
Japan
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about 24 per
cent
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, drastically 27 per
cent
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at
Malaysia
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.
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, in both cases minutest expenditure
health
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on health
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care
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is an
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average of 6 to 3 per
cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, malaysia, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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