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The chart and the table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries. Summarize the iformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and the table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries. Summarize the iformation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart and the table provide information with regard to health protection resources and the expectation of
life
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 in some counties.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
Japan
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 makes up the highest proportion of hospital
beds
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, at 14 per
thousand
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 of the population. It
also
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 represents the greatest average
life
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 expectancy which is 83 years. There are many countries with a similar number of hospital
beds
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, and the gap between these and
Japan
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 is very high. A more detailed look at the data provides, that despite the American Government's spending the highest amount on health per person ($6,719), the average
life
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 expectancy is the lowest, but nearly the same as the other countries. Germany represents the second-highest country in terms of hospital
beds
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, at 8 per
thousand
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 Germans, almost half respect in
Japan
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. The third is the Netherlands accounting for just above 4
beds
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 per
thousand
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 citizens. All the other countries do not exceed 4 hospital
beds
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 per
thousand
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 of the population. Clearly,
Japan
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 and Netherlands Governments, spend a small quantity of money on health per person respect USA, but the expectation of
life
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 is
however
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 higher.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words life, japan, beds, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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