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In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice

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With the advancement of technology, it is predicted in the future that
children
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 will have flexibility in studying whether using technology or at schools which is more traditional. I personally prefer to have a direct learning method with a tutor which can be accessed in current school situations.
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 benefits the
students
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 in improving themselves by
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 feedback and exposure to various
perspectives
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.
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,
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'
perspectives
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 and mindsets are still developing and supervision is needed during the learning process. The traditional method of attending school is believed to be effective as the
students
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 get feedback from the teachers regularly.
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, exams are held regularly in school which measure
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' skills in subjects they have learnt. For the result, it can be used as a parameter for teachers in analyzing
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' strengths and weaknesses which is reported to the parents.
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, learning is a process which I believe can be improved by having other
perspectives
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. If
children
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 study on the internet, which most probably they will study only by themself, they only see the speaker's perspective and themselves.
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,
children
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 who study alone do not have the ability to analyze the possibilities
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perspectives
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 from their learning process. It might lead them to be narrow-minded and degrade their potency which affects opportunities in the future. In conclusion, advanced technology might give us the convenience to access materials in learning.
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, traditional schools are preferred to be more efficient in improving
children
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's skills and ability to analyze.
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Expand on the disadvantages of studying at home through technology
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Provide more varied linking words and phrases to improve coherence and cohesion
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