In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?
These days,
although
food production operations are more developed than ever, commonly is noticed that more people are suffering from hunger. In this
essay, I will discuss some problems and possible solutions for this
subject.
The main factor which cause
Change the verb form
causes
this
disproportionate distribution of food is the necessity to cover the operational costs. What I mean with
it is that to produce something costs not only timeChange preposition
by
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
money, because
of it, the amount Correct word choice
and because
that is
being produced is foccused
only Correct your spelling
focused
in
who is buying, not Change preposition
on
in
those who Change preposition
on
Change the verb form
need
needs
. Take Brazil Correct pronoun usage
itneeds
for instance
, which delievers
meat Correct your spelling
delivers
for
Change preposition
to
all
world, but only to Correct determiner usage
the
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
payed
. A good idea to put in action would be to create an incentive or obligation Correct your spelling
paid
to
who Change preposition
for
exports
food to Correct subject-verb agreement
export
delivery
to poor countries a fraction of these products for free.
Another problem to take Replace the word
deliver
in
consideration is that all Change preposition
into
this
developments in agriculture Change the determiner
these
is
never shared with other countries, making it impossible to recover their economy. Change the verb form
are
Additionally
, because the
concurrence, the biggest nations work hard Change preposition
of the
to
not to give chances to Change preposition
apply
these small countries growth
with their own developments. China Change the determiner
this small countries growth
these small countries growths
for
example, buys not only studies or new technologies, but Add the comma(s)
,for
also
meal with
a lower price to sell to others Change preposition
at
with
Change preposition
at
higher
price, which is a practice to Add an article
a higher
the higher
Unnecessary verb
apply
do
not cannibalize their own marketing. Unnecessary verb
apply
Otherwise
, the Union Nations could organize a universal center
to study good practices in agriculture in order to help these nations to feed those who are hungry.
In conclusion, I tend to believe that the human race has to consider these Change the spelling
centre
already mentioned
possibilities to solve the lack of meat for those who Add a hyphen
already-mentioned
Change the verb form
need
needs
. Correct pronoun usage
itneeds
Accordingly
, it would be generally advisable for all governments to invest in save
Wrong verb form
saving
this
people.Correct determiner usage
these
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