Scientists agree that people are damaging their health by eating too much junk food. Some people think that the answer to this problem is to educate people. Others think education will not work. Discussion both views and give your opinion.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Some
people
Use synonyms
argue that
education
Use synonyms
is unnecessary for
people
Use synonyms
to make them not eat too much
junk
Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
for their health.
Linking Words
However
Add a comma
,However
show examples
I personally think that
education
Use synonyms
is needed for
people
Use synonyms
to have good eating
habits
Use synonyms
because
education
Use synonyms
is the most efficient way to change
people
Use synonyms
’s
behavior
Change the spelling
behaviour
show examples
. On the one hand, some
people
Use synonyms
think that it is not the best way to educate
people
Use synonyms
about better eating
habits
Use synonyms
because the human nature for appetite is much bigger than rationale.
This
Linking Words
means that most
junk
Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
is so delicious that
people
Use synonyms
cannot stop to eat them, even though they know that
junk
Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
is bad for their well-being.
For example
Linking Words
, there was a survey conducted by UCLA’s research team, and 70
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
of participants answered that they eat
junk
Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
for fun and to meet their appetite
although
Linking Words
they know the fact that their health might be damaged by
junk
Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
.
Nevertheless
Linking Words
,
education
Use synonyms
is still necessary to make
people
Use synonyms
eat less
junk
Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
since humans are absolutely different from animals.
In other words
Linking Words
, if
people
Use synonyms
are provided with consistent
education
Use synonyms
and exact information they will change their bad
habits
Use synonyms
in the end.
For example
Linking Words
, research showed that in a certain experiment, a teacher told students that
junk
Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
’s side effects on their health
such
Linking Words
as gaining too much weight, and cavities in his class, and after that class students were provided with hamburgers, fries, and coke for their lunch meal. The result was that 90
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
show examples
of the students in that class didn’t eat them.
This
Linking Words
shows that proper
education
Use synonyms
is effective for
people
Use synonyms
to let them eat healthy
food
Use synonyms
instead
Linking Words
of
junk
Use synonyms
food
Use synonyms
. In conclusion,
while
Linking Words
it is apparent that there is concern that educating
people
Use synonyms
not to eat unhealthy
food
Use synonyms
is not that effective, it is undeniable that ‘teaching and learning’ is the best way to change
people
Use synonyms
’s bad
habits
Use synonyms
.
Submitted by withjungwon on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutritional awareness
  • health education
  • informed choices
  • dietary habits
  • public health campaigns
  • preventative measures
  • regulatory measures
  • restrictive policies
  • food industry practices
  • accessibility
  • affordability
  • food deserts
  • health outcomes
  • behavioral change
  • societal attitudes
  • health risks
  • chronic diseases
  • lifestyle choices
What to do next:
Look at other essays: