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The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think new century will bring? There are pros and cons in 21st century.

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There are pros and cons in
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century
. You know, the world is absolutely changing since
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 age. I believe that it has numberless
of
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effects for
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 decades of generations. In the first place, there are plenty of advantages that more
things
of
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 the world are changing in
21st
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century
.
For example
, technology is very developing and it can help people for
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 to be easier. It
was
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started a little late in
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 age and in recent years, it is ongoing.
Furthermore
, another best reason is that more individuals can move faster from one place to another place, from one continent to another using
high speed
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 jet
airplanes
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.
Besides
, borders have been opened for tourists to visit other countries. And
also
, it is allowed to students
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 study
in
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abroad.
This
 is because technology is increasing and have a lot of opportunities.
However
, there
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 myriad
of
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disadvantages
also
. First of all, technics are very dangerous for
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. Nowadays, everybody
have
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 their own phone, and they are surfing the internet 24 hours a day.
Moreover
, all
things
,
such
 as lessons, works, studies and other
things
 related to
internet
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.
This
 can
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brain functions.
In addition
, people may tend to easy
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 without slave labour. Second of all,
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cars are being modern,
for example
, electronic,
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 can
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cause traffic jams or air pollution. In conclusion, I am sure that many amazing changes will be brought
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 the 21st
century
. I think that with the
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 of
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contemporary technologies multitudes can do many
things
 that were even difficult to imagine a
century
 ago. So, nowadays it is rather difficult and even impossible to imagine,
as for
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me all changes that will impact
on
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the next decades.
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