All Children Should be given a free Laptop when they start high school. Do you agree or disagree.
It is often discussed that every child should be handed a free
laptop
at the beginning of their high school
days. This
essay disagrees with the
view because it could distract them from both studying and engaging Correct your spelling
this
social
time.
Providing a Change preposition
in social
laptop
at an early stage can shift a juvenile’s attention from Add an article
the study
study
. Owing to the fact that laptops are appealing to most of them, Wrong verb form
studying
therefore
, they will tend to spend more time in it even if the timing contradicts with
their tuition hours and as long as they began to spare more Change preposition
apply
durations
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duration
while
watching cartoons or playing games on the device they get less chance to focus on Correct word choice
apply
school
tasks which conversely
stimulates their academic performance to fall. For example
, during the Covid-19 period in England, high school going
children were habituated Add a hyphen
school-going
with
using Change preposition
to
Add an article
a laptop
the laptop
laptop
and Fix the agreement mistake
laptops
as a
result
their institutional skills Add a comma
,result
reduced
Add a missing verb
were reduced
than
the past.
Change preposition
apply
Likewise
, introducing laptops at early
stage have adverse effects Add an article
an early
in
children's Change preposition
on
overall
social communication. In other words
, they prefer to choose virtual
world in order to make interactions rather Add an article
the virtual
to
communicate directly. Remove the marker
apply
Such
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The such
act
eventually leads to social isolation from family Correct article usage
an act
as well as
friends. For instance
, according to
Psychologist
, excessive Fix the agreement mistake
Psychologists
laptop
exposure in terms of medium
of communication among teenagers has proven to turn them Add an article
the medium
avoiding
Change preposition
into avoiding
face to face
conversations Add a hyphen
face-to-face
thus
limiting social participation.
In conclusion, I disagree with the fact of giving free
Add an article
a free
the free
laptop
to children during their high Fix the agreement mistake
laptops
school
career because it brings detrimental consequences such
as distraction of
studies and Change preposition
from
reducing
social engagements.Wrong verb form
reduced
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