All Children Should be given a free Laptop when they start high school. Do you agree or disagree.

It is often discussed that every child should be handed a free
laptop
at the beginning of their high
school
days.
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view because it could distract them from both studying and engaging
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time. Providing a
laptop
at an early stage can shift a juvenile’s attention from
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. Owing to the fact that laptops are appealing to most of them,
therefore
, they will tend to spend more time in it even if the timing contradicts
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their tuition hours and as long as they began to spare more
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watching cartoons or playing games on the device they get less chance to focus on
school
tasks which
conversely
stimulates their academic performance to fall.
For example
, during the Covid-19 period in England, high
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children were habituated
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using
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a laptop
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laptop
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and
as a
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their institutional skills
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the past.
Likewise
, introducing laptops at
early
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stage have adverse effects
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children's
overall
social communication.
In other words
, they prefer to choose
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world in order to make interactions rather
to
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communicate directly.
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eventually leads to social isolation from family
as well as
friends.
For instance
,
according to
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, excessive
laptop
exposure in terms of
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of communication among teenagers has proven to turn them
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face to face
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conversations
thus
limiting social participation. In conclusion, I disagree with the fact of giving
free
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laptop
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to children during their high
school
career because it brings detrimental consequences
such
as distraction
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studies and
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social engagements.
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