In some countries, children often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving the children this message?

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that has been taught by many parents to their kids is that the kids are able to accomplish everything when they work hard for it. The benefit is that they will have a strong mentality.
This
is because the
children
will have a great will and effort to get what they want.
For example
, when they want something from their parent, the
children
will try to fulfil their parent’s
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as
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as they can,
such
as when they want a bike that requires them to have
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attitude, so they will try to give a good attitude.
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,
children
will have
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mental foundation to face
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later. Another benefit is
children
will have
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level of intelligence.
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, when they want something but feel
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to complete the requirement, they will force themselves to provide it
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any possible way. By doing that, the
children
will develop their creative
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is very useful for their
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children
is that the
children
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empathy for others.
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means that
children
will have
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that they must do everything by themselves to get anything,
instead
of using or asking
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help from others.
For instance
, when they want to win a competition,
then
they will try to win that alone by practising alone or studying alone without any need
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help from their friend or family. So, the
children
will assume that the others must do the same attitude of working all alone too. The other harm is
children
will be overproud of themselves. It’s like when they work in a team, they will have difficulties working together especially when there is
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member that doesn’t have
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level of skill or will.
Consequently
, the
children
will feel hard to join the community.
To conclude
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teaching
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children
about hard work to achieve everything
such
as they will have
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mentality and
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level of
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mind. Meanwhile, the harms are the
children
will
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lack empathy and
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to join
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the community.
Thus
, I personally believe that parents should not put much pressure on their life in order to prevent those outcomes.
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