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The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.

The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999.
The chart illustrates the number of vehicles per thousand stolen by thieves in four different countries from 1990 to 1999.
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, despite some fluctuations, there was a stable tendency in the cases of car thefts in the UK, Canada, and France,
while
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 Sweden saw a consistent rise throughout the period given.
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, the UK consistently had the highest figures. In 1990, there were around 17
million
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 stolen vehicles in the UK, after which it fluctuated between 16
million
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 and 20
million
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 until 1997, before dropping back to its initial point in 1999.
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 but to a lower extent, the figure for Sweden accounted for approximately 8
million
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 cases, followed by a progressive increase to around 12
million
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 ones in 1996, it later remained unchanged until 1998, and
finally
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 increased to reach nearly 15
million
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 in just 1 year later. In terms of the two remaining nations, Canadian thieves stole above 5
million
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 cars at the beginning, with a gradual decrease to exactly 5
million
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 in 1994, next it hovered mildly around that number, and a final rise to 5.5
million
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 in 1999.
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, the number of French vehicles decreased to 5
million
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 in 1993
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 but later rose back to more than 5
million
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 in the final year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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