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You had a good meal in a local restaurant with your family. Write a letter to the newspaper to tell them about it, describe the meal you had, and why you think the restaurant is worth visiting

#restaurant #newspaper
Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you are well. I am writing
this
 letter, to describe my experience with my family in one of the newest restaurants in Canary Wharf, called 'The Lampery'.
First,
I would like to say that,
this
 is
extraordinary
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 place, embellished with intricate and vivid art. Everyone will find themself in
completely
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 different world being there. The combination of modern design with art,
its
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 just
breaf
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breath
brief
 taking view. It was my first time,
to be
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 in
the
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 restaurant with that marvellous interior. Despite, how
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differ
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 it is inside I would recommend
this
 place to people
in
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 every age.
Secondly
, the taste of
food
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 is remarkable. I
have
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started with smoked salmon, which was perfect.
Although
 I am not a fan of fish,
this
 dish was
increadible
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incredible
. Following my starter, I ordered a beef steak with grilled vegetables and mashed potatoes. I
have
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finished my meal with
astonishing
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 dessert, which was white chocolate muss and
rasberries
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raspberries
. I really wanted to
highlighted
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 that 'The Lampery'
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was distingished
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distingished
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distinguished
 not only with extraordinary food but
also
 with interior design.
This
 place is definitely worth visiting.
In addition
, the location is very easy, especially for those who
traveling
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 with
underground
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. Sincerely, Martyna,
Submitted by martynaa.j on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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