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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the procedure through which instant nodules are produced.
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, the process of producing noodles is comprised of eight relatively simple stages, during which flour, water, and oil are used to produce instant noodles.
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, vegetables and spices are added into nodules in later stages. The first step commences when flour is provided from storage silos before
flour
Add an article
the flour

The noun phrase flour seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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, water, and oil is stirred using a big mixer. In the following stage, the mixture is rolled through the use of rollers, after which it is carried on dough sheets to reach dough strips. Over the course of the next stage, stripped nodules are shaped into discs, which is followed by cooking with oil and drying them.
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 is followed by adding vegetables and spices into cooked noodle discs, before putting the mixture into equal-sized cups. Ultimately, all cups that are full of prepared noodles are labelled and
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also sealing
Wrong verb form
sealed

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb also sealing. Consider changing it.

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 through the use of a labelling machine.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufactured
  • ingredients
  • dough
  • rolled out
  • thin strips
  • steaming process
  • partially cooked
  • fried
  • dehydrating
  • packaged
  • distribution
  • quality control
  • standards
  • flavoring powder
  • sauce packet
  • traditional pasta
  • dehydration
  • instant cooking
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