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Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online rather than face to face. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 modern era, there are so many social
apps
 like Whatsapp, Instagram, Facebook, et cetera. Most
people
 prefer to socialize in these
apps
 online than meet each other. For me, I would rather socialize online than face-to-face. Right now, everybody has social media
apps
 on their phone, and they can use them to socialize with others anytime, anywhere, which is really efficient since they do not have to meet each other.
Besides
 that, social media has large coverage as
people
 can make
friends
 with other
people
 from other cities, provinces, or even countries,
that
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which
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 they can not do by face-to-face communication.
Moreover
, for
introverts
, it is really nice to make
friends
 and interact online, because they do not have to meet too many
people
 and drain their social battery. Some
people
 often think they can not socialize online if they do not have a good internet connection. Actually, to use social media
apps
, we do not need good wifi, 2 mb/s is enough.
Furthermore
, socializing online can help
introverts
 to express themselves more to their new
friends
.
Introverts
 usually feel flustered because they do not know what to talk about with their new
friends
, but with online meetings,
introverts
 can
make-a-bond
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make a bond
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 with their new
friends
 so
when
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that when
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 they
finally
 meet in real life, they will not feel uncomfortable. In conclusion, socializing online is a positive development since
people
 can communicate efficiently even with a bad connection, and
introverts
 can take time and
make-a-bond
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 with their
friends
 without draining too much social battery.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social media platforms
  • online interactions
  • virtual communication
  • global community
  • interpersonal skills
  • digital divide
  • cyberspace
  • virtual presence
  • social networking
  • mental wellbeing
  • digital literacy
  • safe spaces
  • marginalized groups
  • face-to-face communication
  • socialisation
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