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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think it is negative or positive development?

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In some countries,
purchase
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 a
house
 is more crucial
instead
 of
rental
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renting
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 for
house
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the house
a house
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.
This
, in my
opinion
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,opinion
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result
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results
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 from the mind of
boomer
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the boomer
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generation
 where every human being should have their own building. It should be viewed as
negative
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a negative
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 development because it can be harmful
of
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to
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younger
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the younger
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generation
’s
financial
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finances
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. Most of
oldest
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the oldest
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generation
 may give advice to
latter
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the latter
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generation
 that it is
benefial
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beneficial
 to have our own
house
 as a building that can live in forever. It is happen because
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,in
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in
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at
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 their ages, it is easier to get
a
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apply
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home because of mostly their salaries
is
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are
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 high enough compared to their monthly expenses, so they can save plenty of money. In fact, a lot of houses in cities in
numeous
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numerous
 countries has owned by
elderly
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the elderly
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 age and even they may have more than one
house
 in their country.
Unfortuntely
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Unfortunately
,
the
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apply
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young ages nowadays mostly can not afford to buy their
house
 and choose to rent a flat
bacause
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because
 the price of houses
is increase
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is increasing
is increased
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 significantly
whereas
 their
financial
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financially
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 unstable. Renting a
house
 is more realistic
to
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for
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 young age because they can afford
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a building
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building
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to build
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 for living
also
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and also
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 sufficient for their basic necessity
such
 as groceries, electricity, internet connection and so on. And
this
 is what
mostly
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most
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group
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groups
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 did to balance
financial
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finances
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. In conclusion,
spend
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spending
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 money to buy a
house
 gives advantageous so we can live in our own home ever after without thinking of
pay
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paying
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 for
monthly
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the monthly
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flat’s
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flat
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 bill. Sadly,
young
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the young
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generation
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generations
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such
generation
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as generation
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millenial
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millennial
millennials
 and
generation
 Z mostly can not buy
private
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a private
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house
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houses
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, so it is risky for their
financial
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finances
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Homeownership
  • Property ladder
  • Real estate
  • Mortgage
  • Equity
  • Inflation hedge
  • Stability
  • Long-term investment
  • Asset
  • Liability
  • Housing market
  • Tenure
  • Down payment
  • Property taxes
  • Maintenance costs
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