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Some people say that the main environment problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In some
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's opinion , the
media
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 to publish facts
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humans'
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 thoughts. A different point of
view
 is that it should be controlled .
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view
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views
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 and argue in favour of
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 the one hand , the
media
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true
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 to print
opinion
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opinions
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 of individuals'
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. Because observers should
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truth
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information
 .
In other words
 ,
media
 do not have to deceive inhabitants .
Finally
 , If
people
 know true
information
 after reading false
news
 , they will make various rebellions .
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 , a large number of
people
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news
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newspaper
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. But they know that it is not true facts .
As a result
 , they will be displeased .
On the other hand
 , most
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people
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 take
information
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That is
 why it should be controlled. Unless it is not controlled , false opinions will be printed .
As a result
 , readers get incorrect
information
.
Moreover
 , illegal
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 will
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 and
people
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 that country . I think that it should be in observation . Because all
people
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view
 . Unless it is not
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 supervision , ideas of terrorism will be separated. Inconvenience, most
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observers
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 may be deceived. So it ought to be controlled which true or false
information
. By way of conclusion , the
media
 have to right to print detail of individuals'
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views
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.
However
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belive
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 that someone should
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This
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • habitat
  • extinction
  • climate change
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • global warming
  • sustainable
  • conservation
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