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The table below shows the amount spent on healthcare in different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the amount spent on healthcare in different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table shows the average healthcare spending per
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person
 in three
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 of countries which are East Asia, the Middle East, and
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American
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America
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on
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 2010. Generally, we can see that people in East Asia
country
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 spent the most money compared to
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the Middle
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 East and
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Latin
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American
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America
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. Japanese,
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the first place, spent more than 2,500 dollars
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on
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 well-being facilities
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 the second place, South Koreans, only spent
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half of it and followed by Singaporeans.
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, healthcare spending in the middle east country is only around 800 dollars, as big as the average global spending. Argentina, Chile, and Brazil as
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Latin
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 American
Country
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countries
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 placed
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 with average spending
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of approximately
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 450 dollars.

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