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you have a new dod Dakota. Explain how do you meet her?

#dod #dakota
Since I arrived in Australia, the only thing I had always been talking about was my
dog
:
Indiana
. For major reasons,
such
 as money and time, my partner and I decided to leave her in our country until the perfect time will come, but that moment never came. I clearly remember the day I left our home in Argentina, I cried like there if not were a tomorrow, with
Indiana
 over me. The days turned into months, a global pandemic in between, months turned into years and we never were able to bring our
Indiana
 to
this
 country. During our time here, my partner and I passed through many situations, there were a lot of ups and downs in our lives, but in the end, we are still together.
One
 of the
things
 I did not expect to happen to me was losing all my hair. Maybe you are asking yourself: What does
this
 thing need to be with
Indiana
? Well, after a lot of research, I have found that
one
 of the main reasons of losing hair is separation,
also
 I read that being a part of a
dog
 could be
one
 of the main reasons because you are not playing with their hair anymore, and that lost can have several consequences like mines. I remember walking on the street and watching every french bulldog crossing by like if they were
Indiana
, but they were not. I have always wanted another
dog
, but the guilty of having a new
one
 was killing me for months until the moment I decided to start talking
this
 with my therapist and accept the fact that
Indiana
 is well where she is. So when I moved on and I accepted that my partner and I move forward, was the moment when Dakota appears. A couple of days after Christmas she came into our lives. We did not look for her but she just appears, as I always say: if
things
 need to happen, they will. To summarise, I lived through many
things
 in Australia: being a part of the people I love, and my
dog
, among other
things
, But in the end, not everything seems to be that bad. Once you accept the life you are living as it is, you will see that everything happens for a reason, wich leads us to here: Dakota coming into our world.
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