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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that educational progress Is equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 industrialized and technologically developed
world
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 the problem of
beneficial
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the beneficial
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 impact of
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economy
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the economy
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 and
education
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 on society is being the most discussed topic. The vast majority of people think that
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economy
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economic
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 growth is more essential rather than study growth,
while
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other
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the other
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 half argue that quality
education
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 is equal to
high
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progress
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 of
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country
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the country
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. In my opinion, both of these spheres are
vital
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part
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 of building a successful
country
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.
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 with, there are many merits of good impact of
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economy
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economic
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progress
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 on our community. One of them is
employment
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 effect.
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,
the
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economic
progress
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attract
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 more skilled, professional and qualified specialists all over the world whereby the plenty of them decide to stay and work for
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country's
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the country's
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 government. Having brunch
of
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with
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 the smartest students definitely will increase the number of independent businesses which will be an opportunity
to
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for
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 citizens to find their job.
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, the experience of many countries
prove
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 that
enormous
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an enormous
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 number of businesses
is
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also
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 less amount of unemployed people because of the availability of free workplaces. Moving
further
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, there are
also
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 some positive outcomes of educational
progress
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. The main advantage is that
high quality
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high-quality
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education
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 can be the solution
of
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to
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 global issues. It is not a secret that educated individuals think differently than the average person, they think outside the box,
hence
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 they can suggest possible solutions
of
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to
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 issues that
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 place in
modern
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the modern
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 day.
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, Russian scientist Vladimir H.
in
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2017 discovered
the
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a
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 sort of water plant that can be used as plastic.
Advantage
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 of
this
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 finding is that it dissolves in
ocean
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the ocean
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. There is no doubt that
this
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 can prevent our Earth's slow
dying
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death
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 from
polluting
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pollution
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.
To conclude
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, all the spheres of
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country's
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a country's
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 development
connected
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 to each other, so if
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economy
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the economy
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 will be high
then
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level
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the level
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 of
education
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 will rocket. I contend that not only both of these areas,
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however
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but
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 all of the sides of
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country
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the country
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 should grow equally to get
higher
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a higher
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 reputation in
world
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the world
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 among TOPs.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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