Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that educational progress Is equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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industrialized and technologically developed
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impact of
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and
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on society is being the most discussed topic. The vast majority of people think that
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growth is more essential rather than study growth,
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half argue that quality
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is equal to
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progress
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of
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country
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. In my opinion, both of these spheres are
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of building a successful
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.
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with, there are many merits of good impact of
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progress
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on our community. One of them is
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effect.
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economic
progress
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more skilled, professional and qualified specialists all over the world whereby the plenty of them decide to stay and work for
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country's
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government. Having brunch
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the smartest students definitely will increase the number of independent businesses which will be an opportunity
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citizens to find their job.
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, the experience of many countries
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that
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number of businesses
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also
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less amount of unemployed people because of the availability of free workplaces. Moving
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, there are
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some positive outcomes of educational
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. The main advantage is that
high quality
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education
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can be the solution
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global issues. It is not a secret that educated individuals think differently than the average person, they think outside the box,
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they can suggest possible solutions
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issues that
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place in
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day.
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, Russian scientist Vladimir H.
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2017 discovered
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sort of water plant that can be used as plastic.
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of
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finding is that it dissolves in
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the ocean
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. There is no doubt that
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can prevent our Earth's slow
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from
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.
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, all the spheres of
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country's
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a country's
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development
connected
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to each other, so if
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economy
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the economy
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will be high
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level
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the level
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of
education
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will rocket. I contend that not only both of these areas,
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however
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all of the sides of
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country
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the country
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should grow equally to get
higher
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a higher
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reputation in
world
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the world
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among TOPs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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