The diagram shows a process of making a storage area from a material called concrete canvas

The diagram shows a process of making a storage area from a material called concrete canvas
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The diagram describes the process of creating a depository using concrete canvas,which includes eight stages, involving vans, advanced machinery and a manual workforce.
To begin
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with, bricks should be manufactured. These bricks consist of dry concrete covered with a fibrous top surface and a waterproof layer underneath.
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, they are delivered by vans for
further
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unwrapping.
After
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this
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, unwrapped material is spread on the ground using pegs and rope attached to the car at a length of ten metres.
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this
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, the air is pumped inside with a special air pump, creating space and a door.
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stage takes place underground. The sixth stage involves a worker,who is watering the future warehouse, creating an eight-metre height building
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. Storehouse needs 20-24 hours for setting. The final picture describes the process of storing itself.
To sum up
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, constructing storage from concrete canvas is a multistage method, which requires complex machinery, human resources, vans, cars and specific raw materials.
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