The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the pollution levels in London between 1600 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates dirtying of
air
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the air
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thanks to
smoke
and sulphur
dioxide
in the capital of
US
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the US
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, in
years
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the years
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around 1600 and 2000. Unit of
air
given us as meter cube.
Overall
, we can
noticed
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notice
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that the most dangerous thing to our planet is sulphur
dioxide
. Graph shows, since 1600 the main enemy of
the
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apply
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London city was sulphur
dioxide
and
second
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the second
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pollutant was
smoke
. At the begging of
the
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apply
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1600
year
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years
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, sulfur
dioxide
wasn't
problem
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a problem
the problem
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of the pollution as in 1850 years. Its cause was
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the unusing
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unusing
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unused
of factories and motor cars. After, people started to use many types of technology,
what
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which
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worked thanks to motors and highlighted toxins that I called before, and started to open too
much
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many
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factories closer to 18 century. So thanks
for
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to
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that
air
started to be dirtier. The pick of the pollution level was in 1850.
In
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At
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that time
microgram
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micrograms
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of called
atom
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atoms
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took around
900 meter
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900-meter
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cube
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to cube
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. Between 1950 and 2000 years,
line
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the line
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graph wasn’t stable and got
drop
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a drop
the drop
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in the
last
year.
Smoke
also
was a reason
of
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for
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a
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the
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dirty
air
. It began to appear
since
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in
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1600. And slowly increased till 1900. And started to drop from that year. It was unstable too from 1950 till 2000. In conclusion, both of them (Sulfur
dioxide
,
smoke
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and smoke
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) didn’t give
dangerous
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danger
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in 1600 and 2000. But,
closely
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close
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to
19th
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the 19th
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century, they achieved their pick of pollution.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, smoke, dioxide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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