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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle this problem

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In
this
 industrialised world,
people
 migrate to cities that offer better opportunities for their living and career.
However
, extensive inhabitants in a confined area will develop an imbalance in the environmental elements leading to various detrimental effects on the earth which can be mitigated by several measures that are discussed in
this
 essay. To commence, the overcrowding of individuals flowing to major destinations in need of jobs
consequently
 makes the region congested.
Moreover
, the growing accommodation,transportation and commercial facilities that are essential to satisfy the need of a huge number of
people
 owe a significant contribution to pollution.
This
 can be air, water or soil pollution.
For instance
, research conducted in 2018 compared with the one in 2020 on air pollution in New York City exhibits that there is a drastic improvement in air quality
due to
 the lockdown caused by the pandemic.
In addition
,when the population shoots up in a certain area that will contribute to the overexploitation of the local natural resources. To illustrate water scarcity is not rare in famous cities
such
 as London, where
people
 buy water from supermarkets,
whereas
, in rural
areas
, individuals have plenty of reach to all the basic resources.
Therefore
, overpopulation paves way for the disturbance in the natural distribution of elements causing calamities and disasters.
On the other hand
, the aforementioned problem can be resolved to a certain extent effectively, if government take initiative to distribute the chances and facility extending towards the village
areas
.
Thus
 opening new windows of hope will restrain the unnecessary moving of
people
 over regions.
This
 can be achieved by the promotion of establishing multinational firms in the village
areas
.
To conclude
, emphasising the importance of even distribution of the inhabitation by society and awareness of the amount of disruption
that is
 caused by the overpopulation in urban
areas
 has to do.
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  • strain on infrastructure
  • public services
  • overcrowded
  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
  • increased pollution
  • waste management
  • destruction of green spaces
  • natural habitats
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