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Most countries are compared by their economic success. Do you think there are some other important factors that need to be taken into consideration? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

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Compared with the past, the criteria for comparing countries have dramatically changed. These days, the majority of countries are compared by their economic success. I will discuss it in
this
 essay. There is no denying, a successful economic play a major role to become a powerful country. Needless to say, the United States of America is the most powerful economy of countries all over the
world
 which means they can play role in many parts of the
world
.
For example
, Four years ago,
people
 from throughout the
world
 watch the process of selecting a president Because they know that it affects many parts of their life
such
 as immigration.
In addition
, they can invite the best singer to hold concerts for making
people
 happy in the U.S.
Also
, they are able to be a candidate for holding the
World
 Cup which means they can provide whatever it needs
such
 as building hotels for fans of football, football players, and coach.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think that the meaning of money is different for each
people
 which means you need to concentrate on other happy factors.
However
, if you don't have enough money you can't be happy.
For example
, the value of the currency of Iran is rock-bottom prices because of Trump who was president of the U.S.
Therefore
,
people
 can't go on a trip and it makes
people
 sad. In conclusion, the economic issue is important all over the
world
 and the government should pay money and attention.
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