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İmmigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigrations? To what consequenced can it lead?

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Nowadays, more and more
people
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 are leaving their
countries
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 in a massive way. There are many reasons
people
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 choose to immigrate. In my opinion, adults choose to emigrate for a better economy,
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students
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 believe that international universities will give them better academic knowledge than universities in their native
country
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. Choosing
this
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 way of
life
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 has its own consequences, which I shall discuss in
this
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 essay. Having a better career and earning more money is one of the main reasons parents choose to move to other
countries
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.
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, when unskilled jobs are paid a minimum salary, many families struggle to buy even the basic things that they need for their daily
life
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.
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, they can not fulfil other necessities like rent, electricity or food.
As a result
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, they believe that immigrating to another
country
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 will help them find a better
job
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 with a higher salary.
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, children most of the time, do not like that their parents decide to move from their native
country
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.
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 means to them that they will have to leave their school, their friends, and their habits and start a new
life
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 from the beginning. And
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 may be challenging for them and make them unhappy. On the other side, young adults choose to study overseas as a better option for their education, providing them with better knowledge and more opportunities for their
future
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 careers. Many
students
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 believe that having an international degree will help them get a better
job
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 in the
future
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.
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, having an international degree will make you more reliable and more interesting for
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 employers.
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 the benefits that many
students
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 get from overseas studies, most of them do not go back to their
country
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 to work, but they prefer to have a
job
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 in the
country
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 they are studying.
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 is a very bad thing for their native
country
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. If many
students
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 live
their
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countries
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 and never come back, in their native
country
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 will be fewer young
people
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,
therefore
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 more elderly
people
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. In conclusion, by immigrating to other
countries
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people
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 can benefit a lot,
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 as better academic knowledge and better opportunities for a
job
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 and a
future
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 career. But they should
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 consider the downsides before deciding to move abroad and start a new
life
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.
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