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İmmigration has a major impact on the society. What are the main reasons of immigrations? To what consequenced can it lead?

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Nowadays, more and more
people
 are leaving their
countries
 in a massive way. There are many reasons
people
 choose to immigrate. In my opinion, adults choose to emigrate for a better economy,
whereas
students
 believe that international universities will give them better academic knowledge than universities in their native
country
. Choosing
this
 way of
life
 has its own consequences, which I shall discuss in
this
 essay. Having a better career and earning more money is one of the main reasons parents choose to move to other
countries
.
For instance
, when unskilled jobs are paid a minimum salary, many families struggle to buy even the basic things that they need for their daily
life
.
Also
, they can not fulfil other necessities like rent, electricity or food.
As a result
, they believe that immigrating to another
country
 will help them find a better
job
 with a higher salary.
However
, children most of the time, do not like that their parents decide to move from their native
country
.
This
 means to them that they will have to leave their school, their friends, and their habits and start a new
life
 from the beginning. And
this
 may be challenging for them and make them unhappy. On the other side, young adults choose to study overseas as a better option for their education, providing them with better knowledge and more opportunities for their
future
 careers. Many
students
 believe that having an international degree will help them get a better
job
 in the
future
.
Moreover
, having an international degree will make you more reliable and more interesting for
future
 employers.
Besides
 the benefits that many
students
 get from overseas studies, most of them do not go back to their
country
 to work, but they prefer to have a
job
 in the
country
 they are studying.
This
 is a very bad thing for their native
country
. If many
students
 live
their
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countries
 and never come back, in their native
country
 will be fewer young
people
,
therefore
 more elderly
people
. In conclusion, by immigrating to other
countries
people
 can benefit a lot,
such
 as better academic knowledge and better opportunities for a
job
 and a
future
 career. But they should
also
 consider the downsides before deciding to move abroad and start a new
life
.
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