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Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#visitors #attractions
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 statement that foreigners should be charged higher than locals for visiting traditional and ancient attractions.
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examples. On the one hand, there are many reasons why
tourist
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tourists
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 from different countries have to pay more than local residents.
Firstly
, it has a positive effect on the economy of the regions.
In addition
, foreign
tourists
 spend
much
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money on a wide range of goods and services, including food, souvenirs, accommodation and travel.
For example
, in countries like Malaysia, every year
tourists
 visit
to
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sightseeing
in
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there
that is
 why
this
 country is modernizing day by day because the government spend visitor's money to develop
to
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cultural and historical attractions.
Therefore
, I personally believe, those are more than enough to preserve and protect their
culture
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 heritage.
On the other hand
, there are clear arguments that foreign visitors should not pay more money for tourist sites. One of the main reasons can be that if foreigners realised that they have to allocate
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more budget compared to local residents, they would perhaps decide not to travel there.
In other words
,
tourists
 highlighted locations could fix a price
according to
 the country where they are from. To
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 an example, in Thailand the tour prices
are
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provided to foreigners are based on their country of origin and passport. In conclusion,
although
, some people claim that the fee
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paid for visiting
tourists
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 sites should be equal for abroad people and local inhabitants.
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