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Smart phones and other similar electronic gadgets have reduced the contact between friends. Discuss how far you agree with this statement.

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Due to
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 development in technology, smartphones have taken place to connect with
people
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 from all across the world have phone users now spending more
time
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 on smartphones or other digital electronics.
As a
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result
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, they have reduced their
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 to connect with friends in real. I think
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 gadgets do have some benefits, but the
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result
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 is negative.
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 with benefits, use showcases themselves or showcase their skills on different platforms from all across the globe and
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monetise the skills. For ,example
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 users show their digital skills on Instagram or on Facebook and make money from it. another important observation is
people
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 can easily make friends with the help of the
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 and communicate with them on social platforms.
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, with the help of the sky, they can see each other live on a video call.
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, In the long run, it is not good. Many
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stop interacting with their friends. After being attracted to the
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.
People
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 have lessened their
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 to talk with their loved ones. They just spend most of their
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 on gadgets . As a
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, it will harm them another argument is
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 who spend their
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 on phones are
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less social
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,they don't like to go to Crowdy places and just wanted to spend
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 alone, These kinds of
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 ended up in isolation.
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result
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, stress and depression will trigger. In conclusion, as we talk about all those reasons, not only it is bad for your mind but
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 your physical body is so in long run. It has a lot of negative effects.

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