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Education is not a luxury but a basic human righ and as such should be free for everyone irrespective of personal wealth. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that
education
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 should be totally free of charge regardless of
people
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's wealth. I agree with the statement that all citizens must receive equal
education
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 without charge.
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 with,
due to
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 the overpopulation around the world, some
schools
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 require a tuition fee for students.
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, the human population has increased and reached 8 billion which
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 destroyed
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 in
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education
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the education
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 system.
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, some educational institutions cannot afford their needs
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 as the salary of teachers, gas and electricity and only governmental funds are not enough to maintain
the
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education
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.
Moreover
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, private
schools
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 have gained popularity which
have
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 extra facilities for students and good curriculums.
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, some of them ask for high charges for the service and their needs and only
people
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 who are financially
freedom
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 send their children to private
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.
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,
education
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 should not be separated between the rich and the poor not only it helps to raise a wise generation for nations but
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 it is a basic human right to have an equal educational opportunity. If going to school becomes
luxury
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, it is likely to have ignored and less wised
people
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 in the future. To tackle
this
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 problem, all citizens and especially wealthy
people
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 should be extra taxed to fund all
schools
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along with
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 the aid of governments.
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, most nations' budget goes for military purposes.
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,
instead
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 of that,
education
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 should be prioritized.
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, because of the increase in population, some
schools
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 cannot afford their needs.
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, they ask for a charge.
However
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,
education
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 is a basic human right and should be free for citizens irrespective of personal wealth.
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