Adults do less exercise nowadays. Some think that people can be encouraged to live healthy through sporting events such as Olympics or World Cup. Others think that there are more better ways to encourage adults for exercise. Discuss both views and state you opinion.

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events
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encourage
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to encourage more people to do
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do
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by spreading knowledge among the community and motivating people to practice sports
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