Some people suggest that setting up more gyms will encourage people to remain active. What problems are associated with this proposal? What solutions can you offer for good health?

Public

health

has become an important issue to be discussed by the vast majority of

people

daily, some of them suggest that the availability of

sports

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and gyms is a solution to encourage

people

to remain active,

while

this

proposal is considered to be a solution, there are many problems are associated with. In the following essay, I am going to offer some simple suggestions for good

health

.

To begin

with, the trend of expanding

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the establishment of

sports

clubs and gyms,

firstly

,

it

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will put more financial burdens on the budget,

meanwhile

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in

the

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developing countries like Egypt, there are many other priorities to spend tax-payers money on,

Secondly

, the

sitiuation

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situation

will be much harder in crowded cities,

for example

in my

citiy

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city

, Cairo,

people

are struggling to find small spare shops for rent rather than big ones which are suitable to open

sports

clubs or gyms.

Finally

,

although

folk tend to involve in

sports

activities to keep their

health

fit, there is a shortage of qualified trainers to work in

such

clubs.

On the other hand

, some simple solutions can be considered for good

health

, one of them is to encourage domestic practice at homes, or in public gardens,

for

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some simple facilities in public gardens would be cheap and easy to get for most of

people

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,

other

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solution is to conduct some

sports

events on weekends,

such

as

marthons

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marathons

marathon

or football matches.

However

, many campaigns had launched in the past to raise public awareness against smoking and decrease harm-

health

habits,

this

choice remains possible and active. In conclusion,

health

is crucial but we should think about the ways that are suitable for our

circumistances

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circumstances

to keep our bodies fit

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and save money and time