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some people think that children should be taught to be competitive at school. others, however say that cooperation and teamworking skills are more important. discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #children #school #cooperation #skills
Some argue that
children
shoud
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should
 learn competitive
skills
 at their school,
while
 others maintain that it is much more
essencial
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essential
 for students to acquire capacities of cooperation and teamworking in
educational
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an educational
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institution
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institutions
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. Personally, I support the latter idea because studying
skills
 to develop
great
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a great
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relationship
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relationships
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 with others
cound
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could
 exploit for building
network
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a network
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 for living in the future. It is often pointed out that students must
broden
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broaden
thier
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their
 capacity to compete with someone in order to survive in
challenging
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a challenging
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environment
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environments
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such
 as
tornament
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tournament
 and
exam
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exams
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. Admittedly, students are generally required to have
competitive
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a competitive
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sprit
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spirit
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 in some societies that
places
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 emphasis on the academic record.
This
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 social views;
however
, might make
children
 suffer from
mental
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a mental
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 health
problem
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problems
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.
The
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An
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 environment which always paid attention to acquiring strong mental to compete and compare with someone
affect
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affects
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children
's
developemnt
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development
 of mental. On the other
hands
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hand
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, teaching
skills
 to cooperate and teamwork might help
children
 to
acuire
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acquire
 the ability to
independent
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be independent
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 from their parents. Basically, every
individuals
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individual
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 cannot live without
maintaing
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maintaining
good
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a good
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 relationship with
the
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apply
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society.
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, when a human
do
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does
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 his or her job or lives in
a peculiar communities
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peculiar communities
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,
cooparation
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cooperation
 and teamworking
skills
 would be the key to
build
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building
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good
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a good
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 relationship with others. In conclusion, teaching cooperation and teamworking
skills
 to
children
is
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 much more significant than providing competitive education in terms of its capacity to use
for
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in
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 the future.
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