Some people say that the main problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important problems in the life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are different opinions and arguments about the major main issues in
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life
. Some people believe that the most important concern is ecological problems
such
as declining of
particula
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particular
species.
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think that we have
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many
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more chronic issues in our daily
life
.
While
I
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that loss of plant and animal varieties should
also
be considered, in my
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there
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a lot of
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that need to solve in our normal lives. On the one hand, it can be very dangerous that
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habitats
in
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our
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only
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earth with its devasting consequences. Because
,
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every damage that our sphere has taken is permanent and
this
can crucial effects
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long
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term.
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, climate change, unstable ecologic
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, poverty and drought would be
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the next door if precautions will not be applied.
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the first stage issues
such
as collapsed
wild
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wildlife
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life
and overconsumed plants may not be seen
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big deal, but after things went serious, the dramatic results can come with a huge cost.
On the other hand
, despite the concerning situations in
ecologic
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life
, there are numerous problems in our
standart
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standard
lives which are more important than
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the loss
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of
variety
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a variety
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of creatures. First of all,
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crisis and young unemployment rates can not be neglected in our society.
This
is the most highlighted problem in the community and people are still waiting for solutions from politicians and
government
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. If a person could not be successful
to
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earning
the
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life
,
then
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problems would not
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his agenda at all. The other most problematic area is
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, security and terrorism. Every person wants to secure their
life
and
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survive
without facing any human suffering conditions in the given
life
. Since
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one’s
life
is under threat,
then
there is not too much thing to talk about it after all. So that, giving
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of
secured
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life
to every human nature should be
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important point compared to other things. In conclusion,
while
I am giving emphasise to
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of
downtrend
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the downtrend
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on
spicies
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species
which are living in our sphere, I strongly believe that we have undoubtedly more
critic
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topics that should argue on
our
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daily basis.
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